Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Queen Mary Hospital

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
as we can see the diagrams show us the changes that
happend
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happened
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at Queen Mary Hospital since
it's
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its
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construction in 1960.
since
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From
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1960 to 2000 we can see that the Hospital
still
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in
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on
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the right,
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the car Park
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on the right below the Hospital,
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but it is
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way
more
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smaller
then
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before, in 1960 there was a Shopping
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on the left of the Hospital, But in 1980
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they
remove
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the Shopping
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and
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they
build
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built
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Cancer
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and Pharmacy in the same spot
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as
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the shopping
center
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1960 below the Shopping
center
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there is a Farmland , But
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they
remove it in 1980 and
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they
build a Nursing School, But in 2000
thay
make
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the
car park smaller and
thay
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they
remove the nursing school from the left and
thay
but in next to the car park on the right,
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on the left the Cancer
center
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is way bigger and
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the nursing school old spot on the left down, on 1960 all the buildings are the same size, But in 200 the biggest Building is the Cancer
center
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, thay with synonyms.
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