Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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as we can see the diagrams show us the changes that

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construction in 1960.

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1960 to 2000 we can see that the Hospital

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the right,

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the car Park

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on the right below the Hospital,

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before, in 1960 there was a Shopping

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on the left of the Hospital, But in 1980

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there is a Farmland , But

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build a Nursing School, But in 2000

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, thay with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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3 paragraphs

182 words

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Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Challenge 4 : In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

online education is becoming more and more popular .Some people claim the e-learning has so many benifits that it will replace face to face education soon.Others say that tradational education is irreplaceable.Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people see sports only as a leisure activity, while others believe sports play a more important role. Discuss both views and give your option.

Some schools prefer to teach specialised subjects to students after the age of 15, while others suggest that all the subjects should be taught throughout school life. What are the benefits of these 2 approaches? Which one is better, in your opinion?