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Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Queen Mary Hospital The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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as we can see the diagrams show us the changes that
happend
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happened
happen
 at Queen Mary Hospital since
it's
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its
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 construction in 1960.
since
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From
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 1960 to 2000 we can see that the Hospital
still
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is still
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in
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on
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 the right,
Also
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 the car Park
still
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is still
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 on the right below the Hospital,
But its
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but it is
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 way
more
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apply
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smaller
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then
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than
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 before, in 1960 there was a Shopping
Center
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 on the left of the Hospital, But in 1980
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thay
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they
remove
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removed
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 the Shopping
Center
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 and
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thay
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they
build
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built
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 Cancer
Center
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 and Pharmacy in the same spot
of
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as
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 the shopping
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center
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centre
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 1960 below the Shopping
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center
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centre
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 there is a Farmland , But
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thay
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they
 remove it in 1980 and
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thay
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they
 build a Nursing School, But in 2000
thay
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 make
tha
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the
 car park smaller and
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thay
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they
 remove the nursing school from the left and
thay
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 but in next to the car park on the right,
Also
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 on the left the Cancer
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center
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centre
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 is way bigger and
it's take
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it takes
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 the nursing school old spot on the left down, on 1960 all the buildings are the same size, But in 200 the biggest Building is the Cancer
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center
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, thay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • ancillary
  • expansion
  • capacity
  • medical services
  • emergency department
  • research center
  • modernization
  • aesthetics
  • functionality
  • healthcare technology
  • population growth
  • facility improvements
  • patient care
  • infrastructure
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