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The tables gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.

The tables gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.
The chart below provides information about the usage of
water
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 divided into three types in six different nations. The units are given in m3.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that
water
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 consumption for
agricultural
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agriculture
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 in Russia is the highest figure in the surveyed period.
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,
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 Domestic in China require the lowest amount of
water
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. Looking at the figures in
further
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details
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detail
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, it can be noticed that Russia
become
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became
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 the most
water
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-intensive area with approximately 1863 for agriculture, which
followed
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 by
those
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apply
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of
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that
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in
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Turkey, around 1482.
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, the figure
of
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for
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water
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 use in
this
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 sector
also
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dominate
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 the others in
given
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 chart, ranging up to 700. Turning to the remaining statistic,
opposite
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 is true regarding the
water
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 use of China and
UK
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the UK
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 for Domestic, with about 26 and 38 respectively.
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, the data for Turkey in Industrial is nearly double compared to those of that above, accounting for 56.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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