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universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Develop more comprehensive arguments and provide stronger examples. Delving deeper into each point will help to better support your position.
coherence cohesion
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You presented an introduction and conclusion, providing a clear structure to your essay.
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The argument is balanced, presenting both sides before concluding with a clear opinion.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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