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universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 universities should accept equal numbers of male and female
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 with universities should accept equal numbers of male and female
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task achievement
Work on improving grammatical accuracy and avoiding spelling errors. This will help to make your essay more understandable and polished.
task achievement
Develop more comprehensive arguments and provide stronger examples. Delving deeper into each point will help to better support your position.
coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, use clear paragraph breaks and transitions between ideas. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence cohesion
You presented an introduction and conclusion, providing a clear structure to your essay.
task achievement
The argument is balanced, presenting both sides before concluding with a clear opinion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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