The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
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and
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coffee
and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities over four weeks.
Overall
, most
poulation
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people
buy
coffee
and tea from
shop
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shops
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and fresh
coffee
it
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is not interesting to people from Australia.
in
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addition,
this
trend is different for five cities. Melbourne and Hobard are the same, with 63%. Followed by Sydney which was at 61% and Brisbane represents 56%. Adelaide people are just under 50%.
Moreover
, those who go to buy
instand
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instant
coffee
live in Hobard and Brisbane 55%. Sydney comes in
last
place. Sydney, with 44%, and Melbourne, with 43%.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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