The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the proportions of
time
spent by elderly people in the US for the period from the 1980s to 2010s on different activities.
Overall
, it is obvious that only the
time
spent in theatres decreased
while
for reading, hiking, watching
TV
, and surfing the internet, it increased.
Additionally
, watching
TV
was the most popular activity until it was replaced by hiking in the 2000s. Regarding the graph,
while
the
time
spent on hiking rose dramatically from one to four-fifths during the given period, figures for surfing the internet grew slowly from around 5 in the 1980s to above 10
percent
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in the 2000s after which they rocketed to 50
percent
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at the end
of the period. The proportion of the
time
spent on reading was almost a third at the beginning and after hitting a low of 20
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in the 2000s, sharply climbed to 60
percent
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in the 2010s.
On the other hand
, changes in
time
spent on watching
TV
and theatre were less dramatic. Figures for watching
TV
rose slowly from 60
percent
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in the 1980s and after reaching a peak of 70
percent
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in the 2000s, decreased at the same pace to around two-thirds. The
time
spent in theatres fell by about 5
percent
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overall
, touching the lowest point of 30
percent
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in the 1990s.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, tv, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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