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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shoe how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shoe how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagrams show the data on police spending in 2017 and 2018 in a certain area of Britain. The table gives the amount of
money
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 from various sources,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 the charts present the types of expenses which the police spent
money
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 on.
Overall
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, the funds mainly came from national government support followed by local taxes and other sources respectively.
In addition
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, most of the budget was spent on staff costs.
To begin
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 with, the budget received from the national government stayed at the top position. It increased from 175.5 million in 2017 to 177.8 million in 2018.
Furthermore
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, the second biggest source of
money
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 was local taxes which rose from 91.2 million in 2017 to 102.3 in 2018.
Moreover
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, there were three types of expenses for which the
money
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 was spent.
First,
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salaries accounted for 75% in 2017 and
then
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 it slightly decreased to 69% in 2018.
Second,
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the budget for buildings and transportation development remained the same at 27%.
Finally
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, the technology costs climbed from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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