The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram shows the percentage of weekly income of families in a certain country which was spent for many types of
expenses
in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, the highest spending in 1968 was food expenses
, meanwhile, the lowest spending was fuel costs and cost of personal goods in 2018.
To begin
with, food costs stayed at the top position in 1968. It accounted for 35% of total weekly income. In 1968, housing, clothing and footwears are the second highest portion at 10%. In addition
, the group of fuel and power was at the bottom position in both years. Furthermore
, leisure expenses
contributed 23% of total weekly revenue in 2018 and it was the biggest portion. Although
the housing costs significantly increased from 10% in 1968 to 19% in 2018, it could not beat the leisure expenses
. As a result
, it remained in the second place in 2018. Finally
, the household goods remained the same at 8% in both years.Submitted by Punpun on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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