The diagram below shows the process for producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The flow chart illustrates the way in which bottled or carbonated drinks.
Overall
, there are five stages in the whole carbonated
water producing
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process, beginning with the
water
cleaning and the end delivery to markets. 
At
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the beginning, the raw
water
cleans
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by passing through chemicals.
Then
it is transferred for heating to help to pump it with electric heating.
Then
, the heating
water
is sent to the cooling pipe and carbonated dioxide
water
. Where carbon dioxide is introduced to create the carbonate affected. After the join carbon dioxide
as well as
it will be sent mixing stage. That stage starts with mixing
coloring
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and
also
syrup, the most important thing, which is
flavor
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.
Next,
they are filtered and
then
split into two during bottling. Again, prior to bottling and canning. It is fizzy drinks
look
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like
Coca-cola
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Coca-Cola
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The finished drinks are
then
boxed up and sent to supermarkets for retail.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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