The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts give demographic information about marital status in

both

Australia and Canada. It is immediately noticeable that the vast majority of

people

both

countries are technically married.

However

, in

Canada

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the majority of these marriages have ended but the

people

have not been divorced with 53% of the population being separated from their spouse.

This

is compared to only 41% in Australia where there is a significantly higher proportion of

people

still in their marriage. With regard to the other

figures

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figures,

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they are relatively similar for

both

countries with slightly more Canadians never having been married or having lost their spouse and slightly more Australians being divorced.

However

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another striking fact is that there

are

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three

percent

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per cent

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of Canadians

living

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live

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in a

same sex

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same-sex

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marriage but there are no Australians in

same sex

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same-sex

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marriage recorded.

Overall

, we can see that the majority of

people

are either married or separated but not yet divorced in

both

countries.

However

, Canadians were more likely to have ended their relationships.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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169 words

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marital status
population
pie charts
percentage
categories
Married
Single
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noticeable trends
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