The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give demographic information about marital status in
both
Australia and Canada. It is immediately noticeable that the vast majority of
people
in
both
countries are technically married.
However
, in
Canada
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the majority of these marriages have ended but the
people
have not been divorced with 53% of the population being separated from their spouse.
This
is compared to only 41% in Australia where there is a significantly higher proportion of
people
still in their marriage. With regard to the other
figures
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they are relatively similar for
both
countries with slightly more Canadians never having been married or having lost their spouse and slightly more Australians being divorced.
However
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another striking fact is that there
are
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three
percent
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per cent
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of Canadians
living
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in a
same sex
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marriage but there are no Australians in
same sex
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marriage recorded.
Overall
, we can see that the majority of
people
are either married or separated but not yet divorced in
both
countries.
However
, Canadians were more likely to have ended their relationships.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words both, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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