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The graph shows the average of music consumption made by people living in the UK from the year 2013 to 2018.

The graph shows the average of music consumption made by people living in the UK from the year 2013 to 2018.
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The chart illustrates the average consumption of music in Britain between 2013 and 2018.
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it is clear that
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 the consumption data went up and down several times. The highest
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 in
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 survey was 2022, and the lowest one was
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2021. The difference between these two years was 10%. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that in the
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 2015, the percentage was at 24%, and it dropped quickly in the next
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, and the following
year
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. Stop decreasing at 18% in 2017.
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, it increased steadily in the next two-
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 period and reached 20% eventually in 2019 which was the same figure as the
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2016.
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, a downward trend can be observed in the two continuous years. In the
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2021, the number of music consumption was reduced to 15%. Next
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, it soared sharply to 25% which was close to the beginning
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