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The diagrams are the existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery.

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The given plans illustrate the blueprints at the moment and in the future for the renovation of an art gallery.
Overall
, if the proposal
be
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 gone through, the
exhibition
 space will be opened up with the entrance which make every part of the building accessible.
Additionally
, the education space will be constructed, replacing the lobby and office for the didactic purpose. From the entrance, there is a lobby and an office which will be altered by an education area with a store beside.
Moreover
, now, in the central area of the building, there are two temporary exhibitions and a permanent one,
then
 they will be merged into the large permanent
exhibition
 area, not only the space will be more
opened
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, but the entrance from the East side will
also
 be moved to the
center
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. Turning towards the part behind the gallery at
first,
it
then
 will have a door connected to the
exhibition
 and become the special
exhibition
 room.
In addition
, there will be a store for shopping
purpose
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task achievement
It's essential to be precise in describing changes. Ensure that you mention all significant alterations clearly and concisely.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear overall description of the changes in the floor plans.
coherence
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a clear beginning and end to your essay.

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