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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption ofenergy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features,andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption ofenergy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features,andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amounts of energy in the USA from 1980 to 2012, and predictions
to
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 2030.
Overall
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Petrol
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 and
Oil
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 were consistently keeping
a
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 upward trend as the dominant fuel in
32-year
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a 32-year
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 period.
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 their consumption is expected to continue
increase
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, reaching 50 quadrillion units. In 1980, the consumption of nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower almost had the same quantity (less than 5q), stood at the
last
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 levels of
the
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energy.
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 the
amounts
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 of
petrol
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 and
oil
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 in the USA was 35q, ranking the first place. Coal and natural gas stayed
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middle
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 with 20p and 16p respectively. Over a period of 32 years, until 2012,
expected
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 hydropower experienced a slight decrease, the other energy consumption
were
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all had
a
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 upward trend.
Petrol
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 and
oil
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 reached 40q, coal and natural gas were both around 23q. As for projections, the amounts of natural gas and hydropower will remain stable, but coal
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petrol
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 and
oil
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 will
continue
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 have
significant
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 rise to 30q and 50q respectively. A slightly upward trend will be seen in the nuclear and solar/wind from 2025 to 2030.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, oil, q with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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