The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption ofenergy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features,andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption ofenergy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

Summarise the information byselecting and reporting the main features,andmake comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the amounts of energy in the USA from 1980 to 2012, and predictions
to
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2030.
Overall
Petrol
and
Oil
were consistently keeping
a
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upward trend as the dominant fuel in
32-year
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a 32-year
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period.
Besides
their consumption is expected to continue
increase
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, reaching 50 quadrillion units. In 1980, the consumption of nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower almost had the same quantity (less than 5q), stood at the
last
levels of
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energy.
Besides
the
amounts
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of
petrol
and
oil
in the USA was 35q, ranking the first place. Coal and natural gas stayed
at
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middle
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with 20p and 16p respectively. Over a period of 32 years, until 2012,
expected
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hydropower experienced a slight decrease, the other energy consumption
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all had
a
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upward trend.
Petrol
and
oil
reached 40q, coal and natural gas were both around 23q. As for projections, the amounts of natural gas and hydropower will remain stable, but coal
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petrol
and
oil
will
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have
significant
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rise to 30q and 50q respectively. A slightly upward trend will be seen in the nuclear and solar/wind from 2025 to 2030.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, oil, q with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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