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Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of town and cities than to build more housing . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #plant #trees #areas #town #cities
There are
citicsen
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citizen
critics
beliving
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believing
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 that it is more
convinenent
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convenient
 to plant trees and green
areas
 in open
areas
 around cities and
twon
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town
towns
insted
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instead
 of building more housing and
cemint
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cement
building
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buildings
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, and I strongly agree
to
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with
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 that for
certine
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certain
reason
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reasons
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.
Firstly
, green
areas
 make the air
more healthy
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healthier
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 to
breath
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breathe
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,
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 and balance the carbon
realises
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released
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 by houses.
Also
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 green
areas
 can increase the quality of life as
people
 can find places to walk and spend calm time
aways
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away
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of
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from
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 building noises.
Secondly
by
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apply
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planting more trees
instead
 of more
building
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buildings
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 will make it less crowded and be able to provide service
easly
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easily
 for the
people
,
as well as
city
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the city
a city
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 will become more
frindly
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friendly
 to the
envorenment
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environment
. The
people
 who think that it is much better to build our city with more green
areas
instead
 of making it crowded with houses and
resident
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residents
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, are the
people
 who talk about
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high
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hight
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high
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 quality
of
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apply
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cities to live in and
envoronmently
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environmentally
environment
 friendly
areas
 to be part of
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grammar
Ensure accurate spelling and grammar. For example, 'citicsen' should be 'citizens,' 'convinenent' should be 'convenient,' etc.
task
Expand on points with more examples and explanations. This helps in achieving a complete response to the topic.
coherence
Break longer sentences into shorter ones for clarity and coherence.
task
You have identified the main argument and supported it with reasons.
structure
Your essay has clear sections for introduction, body, and conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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