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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts
shows
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show
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 how much money is spent on
health
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 care across Europe and how
this
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 spending has changed in the
last
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ten
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years
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.
Overall
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 we can see that there was very little difference in
ten
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years
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 in the
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percent
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per cent
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 of
GDP
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 spent on
health
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 but there was a lot of difference in the
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percent
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per cent
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 spending on
health
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 in different
countries
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. Spending for all
three
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years
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 was exactly
same
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the same
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 in four of the
countries
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 with
three
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countries
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 spending one
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percent
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per cent
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 more of
GDP
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 on
health
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 over
ten
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years
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 and four
countries
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spend
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spending
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 one
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percent
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per cent
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 less.
In contrast
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 to
this
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was the only country where there was a bigger change and spent one
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percent
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per cent
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 less
GDP
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 every year in the chart. It is
also
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 interesting that Belgium Denmark France Norway and Switzerland had
highest
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the highest
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 percentage
spending
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of spending
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 on
health
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 of their
GDP
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 with it
was
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being
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 around
ten
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percent
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. Switzerland was the highest at 11
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percent
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per cent
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 in all
three
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years
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.
This
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 was
considerable
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considerably
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 more than Estonia at only 3% in all
three
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years
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words health, ten, years, percent, gdp, countries, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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