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Solar energy is becoming popular in many countries of the world because of its availability without any limit. Do the advantages of solar energy outweigh its disadvantages?

In
this
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 period of modernity, many nations around the globe are relying on solar energy for their unlimited supply of
power
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.
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, its unlimited availability makes it really the
favourit
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favourite
option.
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, in
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 essay
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I will give my opinion and discuss both the advantages and the disadvantages with a suitable conclusion.
Firstly
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, many sunny nations around the world are investing heavily in solar
power
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such
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 as the UAE and KSA .
therefore
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, it is getting a new name because of how big the solar
power
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 plant
are
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, and the name is ( solar farm ) ,
countries
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 are investing because they think that solar
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 is unlimited ,
for
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example
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 the UAE has the biggest solar farm and
there
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 reason for building it was to lower the CO2 emissions .
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 , the carbon footprint of solar energy is quite low compared to FOSSIL FUEL
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power plants
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power
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-plant.
This
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 makes the solar option really attractive in those parts of the world where it is always sunny.
Secondly
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, solar
power
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 in itself is a huge investment and
require
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 a lot of maintenance and paying the bill to support the
infrastructre
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infrastructure
.
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, it
completely
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 useless in
countries
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 where it is always cloudy.
therefore
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, it is not worth the investment and to add insult to injury till now solar energy is only the the number six form of
power
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 in
all
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apply
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the globe after the fossil fuel and
the
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apply
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nuclear
power
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 .
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, an article in the UAETIMES stated that the solar
power
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 industry is struggling to compete with traditional burned
power
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 and never in history till now the solar
power
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 was the only
power
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 source in any country. In conclusion, many
countries
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 around the globe are embracing the
power
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 of the sun by using solar
power
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 to lower their CO2 levels.
As a result
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 helps save the planet and I totally agree,
On the other hand
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 , solar is not cheap at all.
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,it is useless in
countries
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 where it is always cloudy or has a minimum sun cover, I think global warming is real and the use
solar
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of solar
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power
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system
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 could be one of the best solutions to save the planet.

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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear stance and provides an argument for both the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy. However, make sure to refine your points further to reduce redundancy and improve depth.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single main idea supported by relevant examples. This will help improve the logical flow of your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Try to eliminate minor spelling and grammatical errors to improve the readability of your essay. This will also help in making your arguments more coherent.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly sets the scene and states the purpose of the essay, which contributes positively to your overall coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion effectively, which is a strong point.
task achievement
The use of specific examples like the UAE and KSA's investments in solar power helps in substantiating your points, making the arguments more persuasive.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • inexhaustible
  • renewable energy
  • mitigating
  • initial setup cost
  • long-term savings
  • low maintenance
  • remote and rural areas
  • socio-economic development
  • intermittent
  • storage technologies
  • toxic materials
  • recycling and disposal mechanisms
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • fossil fuels
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