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The chart below show the percentage of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in two different cities in 2017

The chart below show the percentage of second language classes taken by Australian secondary school students in two different cities in 2017
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The pie charts depict the proportion of Australian high school students who learned a second
language
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 in
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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 in the year 2017.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Mandarin was the highest learned
language
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 in both the cities in the given year. In both
Melbourne
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 and
Sydney
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, students showed their highest interest in learning Mandarin and the percentages were 40% and 45% respectively.
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, Japanese was the second highest
language
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 opted by the students in both the cities and were comprised of 25% in
Melbourne
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 and 30% in
Sydney
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. In
Sydney
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, the least preferred languages to learn were Indonesian and Italian, which comprised only 10% accumulatively as a whole,
whereas
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, in
Melbourne
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,the percentage of Italian and Indonesian
language
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 was 15% and 10% respectively.
In addition
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, the other
language
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 came in third position in
Sydney
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 and its percentage was 15%,
while
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 it was 10% in
Melbourne
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 and was equivalent to Indonesian per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, melbourne, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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