Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school?

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among adults is regular
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their aim. These issues could be solved by
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which
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for health.
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health, regular
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of
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would be a big challenge to start. Because of the absence of like-minded
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who want to start
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,
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study which was conducted by Harvard researchers illustrated that 60% of
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particular type of sport including doing
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not started yet because of
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of
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and other activities in their
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. It shows the main causes and issues why
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postpone their aims like regular
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. Fortunately, these issues are not
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big
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and they have ways to deal
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management. By separating your all day into main tasks,
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person
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could avoid extra
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the
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daily routine. The second option is finding communities in
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confidence and
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, different marathons and
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in the morning are useful to start
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own
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in future. All things considered that
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doing exercise is not difficult as could be seen. Despite the factors like
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, there are always ways how to deal with them. If
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make
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the decision to start, nothing will be more effective than
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and aim of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reinforce learning
  • personalized attention
  • student-to-teacher ratios
  • comprehensive coverage
  • academic and non-academic subjects
  • well-rounded development
  • address specific weaknesses
  • grade improvement
  • performance in exams
  • leisure time
  • burnout
  • educational opportunities
  • socio-economic disparity
  • over-scheduling
  • balanced approach
  • after-school programs
  • weekend tutoring
  • additional practice
  • constructive criticism
  • holistic growth
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