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The picture below shows the use of renewable energy accounting the total energy from 1971 to 2006.

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The chart illustrates how much renewable
energy
 was used in six countries between 1971 and 2011
Overall
, there were increases in the percentage of
energy
 from renewable sources in all countries examined, except for Finland, whose figures slightly decreased but were still the highest throughout the period. The proportion of electricity coming from renewable sources of
energy
 in Finland started at shy of 25%, after which it saw wild fluctuations within the first 18 years.
This
 figure
then
 increased steadily from 16% (which was the lowest point) in 1989 to about 23% in 2011.
Similarly
, the figures for Denmark fluctuated in the range from 10 to 15% in the first 25 years, followed by a moderate increase to about 17% in 2011. Roughly 8% and 5% of the total electricity production in France and Germany came from renewable
energy
 in 1971, with subsequent small fluctuations in the next 15 years, and a final rapid growth to just under 15% in 2011. The figures for the US and the UK saw more steady increases from around 2,5% and 1% in 1971 to 18% and 6% in 2011 respectively, with the latter country relying the least on
this
energy
.
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Use a clear and consistent structure throughout the essay. Each body paragraph should ideally focus on a single country or a smaller group of countries to maintain coherence.
logical structure
The essay maintains a good logical progression of ideas, making it easy for the reader to follow.
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The response directly addresses the task, providing detailed insights into the trends of renewable energy use in different countries.
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