The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

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The line graph provides information about the total number of people in Japan in terms of age group commencing in 1960 and how it is been estimated in 2040.

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, it can be seen that the percentages of 15 to 65 decreased

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it is expected to rise

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of 2024.

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the population of children increased

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of the period, senior citizens surpassed and it is been

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to increase in 2024. the population of children in 1960 stood at 30 per cent.

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figure increased to about 35% in 1970 before it started fluctuating to about 15% in 2010. the total number remained stable and it is been projected to be the same by 2024. The total number of people of 15 to 64 was around 65% in 1960. The figure decreased to about 60% ,

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, it is expected to rise to about 62% in 2040.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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The chart below shows the Japan's population by age groups starting in 1960 and including a forecast to 2040.

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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People today can easily access information online. So libraries are no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that the only way to get success is to go to universities while others think that it depends on other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?