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The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Instructions to follow • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task • Write atleast 150 words

The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Instructions to follow • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task • Write atleast 150 words
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This
given
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map provides the development of
village
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the village
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 of Rye
mouth
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Mouth
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. The tow maps provide the
diffrence
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difference
 between
year
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the year
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 1995 till nowadays.
Over all
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Overall
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, the newest
virsion
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version
 of the village is
more
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better than
old
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the old
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 version.
Acoording
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According
 to the graph, it is noticeable that there is a development in
construction
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the construction
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 sector. It can clearly
seen
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be seen
see
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 that there is a lot of changes
has
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have
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 been on. the village by the years. As
showen
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shown
 the forest park has been changed to be 2 tennis
yard
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yards
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.
Also
, on the north of
tennis
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the tennis
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 yeard become a golf area.
More over
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Moreover
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, the fish market was demolished and
replace
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replaced
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it
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apply
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to
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with
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 apartments. In
addtion
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addition
, the number of houses has
increasd
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increased
. Regarding
to
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the maps it is remarkable that the
number of
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apply
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population has increased since 1995.
Rfrance
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According
 to the two maps there is a big and significant effort in
construction
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the construction
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 sector.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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