Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly around the world. What are the reasons for this? Suggest some solutions.

In recent years, the
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crime
among adolescents and young adults
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increasing at an alarming
rate
in many parts of the world. In
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I am going to discuss the reasons and
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suggest some solutions to
this
problem.
Firstly
, the
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numbers
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of
teenager
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a teenager
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who are breaking the law
are
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increasing
due to
many factors.
According to
some research, children who grow up
from
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low-income families or
living
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in highly
rate
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crime
areas
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a higher chance
to become
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a
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part of the
rate
of
youth
crimes.
Secondly
, not
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all
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students can get a proper education to acknowledge that if their actions are right or not.
Also
, because of the physiological changes in adolescents and young adults
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their behavior
to be
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harder to understand.
For example
, parents can't actually understand what their children are thinking or trying to do, they can talk back to their parents and do more
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things.
Finally
, one
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most common causes of
youth
crime
increasing
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is from other individuals in
the
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society
, there are hundreds
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type
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types
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of people who could exist in our
society
, and they are willing to ask you to do illegal things for their own good.
Although
there are still plenty of ways to solve the issue. First of all, the governments should put these young offenders into juvenile detention
centers
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to educate them back from the start.
And many
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rules should be added and used against teenagers
that
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who
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are trying to break the law or doing illegal things like dealing drugs or robbing. Another way is
the
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society
should raise
people
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awareness against the problem that the
youth
crime
rate
is
raising
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rising
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extremely fast.
Last
but not least, schools should add more lessons to talk about crimes and how to avoid breaking the law as much as possible.
However
, it is not that all of these ways could stop the
rate
of
youth
crimes completely, but it is still helping us a little
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reducing the
rate
of
crime
nowadays. In conclusion, the
society
and the governments are still trying their best to stop the
crime
rate
as soon as possible,
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