The bar chart shows the persentage of Australian boys and girls attending 4 different sport activities after school 2010. summarise the data
The chart compares the percentage of
Australians
school pupils participating Correct your spelling
Australian
swimming
, Change preposition
in swimming
football
netball and basketball activities later school in 2010. Overall
, the girls
engaged more swimming
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in swimming
netball
than Correct word choice
and netball
boys
. Correct article usage
the boys
However
, among the remaining sports, boys
partaked
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partake
partaken
football
at the highest rate. Regarding, the is Change preposition
in football
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the percent
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
boys
attended
swimming, Correct pronoun usage
who attended
this
indicator 3
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is 3
percent
less than Change the spelling
per cent
girls
. The most
girl pupils participated Correct article usage
Most
netball
the highest point Change preposition
in netball
with
18 Change preposition
at
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
In
the other hand, the partaking of Change preposition
On
the
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apply
boys
this
sport the lowest point Change preposition
in this
with
3 Change preposition
at
percent
. In 2010 Change the spelling
per cent
boys
attended many
types of sport than Correct quantifier usage
more
girls
in the schools of
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in
to
, more pupils engaged Change preposition
apply
football
than Change preposition
in football
other
types of sport in Australia. The Change preposition
in other
boys
index of engaging Change to a genitive case
boy's
boys'
football
was 20 percent
and the 4 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
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per cent
girls
attended basketball almost similar mark 8 and 6 percentages
respectively.Replace the word
per cent
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