Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.
Hi Sarah!
I am happy to hear that you're coming to Japan soon. When are you exactly arriving? I can potentially have some time off from work so would be nice to know that beforehand. And we can maybe make a trip plan.
I have so many
reccomendation
around Correct your spelling
recommendations
recommendation
Tokyo
area, but I'd Correct article usage
the Tokyo
reccomend
you to visit Kamakura. It's a good option for Correct your spelling
recommend
daytrip
from Tokyo and easy access by train Correct your spelling
a day trip
about
an hour.
You can find historical places, temples, shrines, Change preposition
for about
and
bamboo Correct word choice
apply
forest
etc. Fix the agreement mistake
forests
Also
you can eat local street foods that things to do there. Add a comma
Also,
Reason
I Add an article
The reason
reccomend
you to go there Correct your spelling
recommend
because
it's close to my home town!
Well during your stay in Japan, if you want to work and save Add a missing verb
is because
your
money, Correct pronoun usage
apply
best
option is working in Add an article
the best
ski
resort in Hokkaido. I have some Add an article
a ski
the ski
friends
already done working at ski
resort since Add an article
a ski
threre
are many Correct your spelling
there
tourst
from overseas coming, Correct your spelling
tourist
tourists
tours
this
job is demanding and always they're looking for new
Add an article
the new
a new
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
of
English Correct your spelling
or
speaker
. And Fix the agreement mistake
speakers
good
Correct article usage
the good
things
Fix the agreement mistake
thing
they
provide food and Add a missing verb
is they
accomodations
as well so you can save heaps of money. Even for myself if I have Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
chance
I would love to work in Add an article
the chance
a chance
ski
resort.
To make local Add an article
a ski
the ski
friends
, you just need to go to local
bar called "izakaya". Normally people think Japanese are shy but we like to Add an article
a local
social
and Replace the word
socialise
having
Wrong verb form
have
good
time with Add an article
a good
friends
. Especially in Tokyo
Correct article usage
the Tokyo
area
there are some Add a comma
area,
place
called "yokocho" Fix the agreement mistake
places
many
people looking to meet Rephrase
where many
foreingers
Correct your spelling
foreigners
and
I Correct word choice
apply
also
made some friends
from US
when I went for Correct article usage
the US
drink
with my friend.
I can't wait to see you and show you around!
AlyssaAdd an article
a drink
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coherence cohesion
Try to enhance the logical structure by organizing your thoughts more clearly. For example, separate the paragraphs for recommendations, job suggestions, and tips on making friends to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a more varied sentence structure and connectives to make the text flow better.
task achievement
You used an appropriate and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is fitting for the context.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are well done and add a personal touch.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,