Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

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Hi Sarah! I am happy to hear that you're coming to Japan soon. When are you exactly arriving? I can potentially have some time off from work so would be nice to know that beforehand. And we can maybe make a trip plan. I have so many

reccomendation

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recommendations

recommendation

around

Tokyo

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the Tokyo

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area, but I'd

reccomend

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recommend

you to visit Kamakura. It's a good option for

daytrip

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a day trip

from Tokyo and easy access by train

about

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an hour. You can find historical places, temples, shrines,

and

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apply

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bamboo

forest

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etc.

Also

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you can eat local street foods that things to do there.

Reason

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reccomend

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recommend

you to go there

because

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is because

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it's close to my home town! Well during your stay in Japan, if you want to work and save

your

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apply

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money,

best

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the best

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option is working in

ski

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a ski

the ski

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resort in Hokkaido. I have some

friends

already done working at

ski

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a ski

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resort since

threre

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there

are many

tourst

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tourist

tourists

tours

from overseas coming,

this

job is demanding and always they're looking for

new

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the new

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worker

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workers

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English

speaker

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speakers

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. And

good

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the good

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things

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they

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provide food and

accomodations

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accommodations

accommodation

as well so you can save heaps of money. Even for myself if I have

chance

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I would love to work in

ski

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a ski

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resort. To make local

friends

, you just need to go to

local

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a local

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bar called "izakaya". Normally people think Japanese are shy but we like to

social

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and

having

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good

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a good

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time with

friends

. Especially in

Tokyo

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the Tokyo

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area

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area,

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there are some

place

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places

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called "yokocho"

many

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where many

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people looking to meet

foreingers

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foreigners

and

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also

made some

friends

from

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the US

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when I went for

drink

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a drink

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with my friend. I can't wait to see you and show you around! Alyssa

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coherence cohesion

Try to enhance the logical structure by organizing your thoughts more clearly. For example, separate the paragraphs for recommendations, job suggestions, and tips on making friends to improve readability.

coherence cohesion

Work on developing a more varied sentence structure and connectives to make the text flow better.

task achievement

You used an appropriate and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is fitting for the context.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing of your letter are well done and add a personal touch.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

273 words

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Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

The Closing

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

“Rapid advances in technology will make the world of the future a more dangerous place” Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumers. Some people believe we should buy food from the local farmer to protect the environment and support local businesses. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitan cities with people from all over the world. How can the government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously?