Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

Hi Sarah! I am happy to hear that you're coming to Japan soon. When are you exactly arriving? I can potentially have some time off from work so would be nice to know that beforehand. And we can maybe make a trip plan. I have so many
reccomendation
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recommendations
recommendation
around
Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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area, but I'd
reccomend
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recommend
you to visit Kamakura. It's a good option for
daytrip
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a day trip
from Tokyo and easy access by train
about
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an hour. You can find historical places, temples, shrines,
and
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bamboo
forest
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etc.
Also
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you can eat local street foods that things to do there.
Reason
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I
reccomend
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recommend
you to go there
because
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it's close to my home town! Well during your stay in Japan, if you want to work and save
your
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money,
best
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the best
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option is working in
ski
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resort in Hokkaido. I have some
friends
already done working at
ski
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resort since
threre
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there
are many
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tourist
tourists
tours
from overseas coming,
this
job is demanding and always they're looking for
new
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the new
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worker
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workers
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of
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or
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English
speaker
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speakers
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. And
good
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things
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they
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is they
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provide food and
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
as well so you can save heaps of money. Even for myself if I have
chance
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I would love to work in
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resort. To make local
friends
, you just need to go to
local
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a local
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bar called "izakaya". Normally people think Japanese are shy but we like to
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and
having
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good
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time with
friends
. Especially in
Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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area
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area,
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there are some
place
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places
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called "yokocho"
many
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where many
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people looking to meet
foreingers
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foreigners
and
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I
also
made some
friends
from
US
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the US
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when I went for
drink
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a drink
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with my friend. I can't wait to see you and show you around! Alyssa
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coherence cohesion
Try to enhance the logical structure by organizing your thoughts more clearly. For example, separate the paragraphs for recommendations, job suggestions, and tips on making friends to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a more varied sentence structure and connectives to make the text flow better.
task achievement
You used an appropriate and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is fitting for the context.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are well done and add a personal touch.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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