The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph depicts data on the amount of money that was spent on books
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four European countries over the course of ten years.
Overall
, between 1995 and 2005, a rising trend can be seen between
four
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countries. Germany took
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lead, reaching
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number,
while
France
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Italy are not far behind.
However
, Austria experienced a
sighificant
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significant
climb, attaining nearly the
France
level.
To begin
with, in 1995, Germany started at 80
millions
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of
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dollars, following that it gradually reached its vertex by 2005 at about 95. As the country with the lowest rate
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selling
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,
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accounted for 30
millions
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dollars in the beginning, it
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moderately over the next 6 years,
then
it skyrocketed, accumulating just above 70 by 2005.
On the other hand
,
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Italy
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and
France
started at nearly the same level, Italy at 50 and
France
at about 55. Over the years the sellings gradually grew,
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by 2005,
France
surpassed
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Italy, reaching roughly 72
millions
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dollars,
while
Italy accomplished just over 60.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • surge
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • comparison
  • significant change
  • spending patterns
  • economic conditions
  • cultural factors
  • cross-country comparison
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