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the graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported four different countries in tonnes.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and comparisons where relevant

the graph below shows the amount of tea and coffee imported four different countries in tonnes.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and comparisons where relevant
#amount #tea #coffee #four #countries #tonnes #information #points #comparisons
The bar chart
provide
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provides
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 information about
summarized
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the summarized
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 amount of goods that have been imported .
Overall
, the data will be calculated by reaching
such
 goods as
tea
 and
coffee
 in tonnes by
Canada
,
UK
,
USA
 and
Germany
 .The highest point of
tea
 importing
belong
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belongs
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 to
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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,
while
 the top of
coffee
 to
Germany
. It can be seen
while
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that
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 in
Canada
 and
Germany
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Germany,
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 there was an advantage in Favor of
coffee
, in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 and
USA
 the sign turning to
tea
.
To begin
 with,
amount
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the amount
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 of
tea
 in
UK
 the was equal to 160000,
while
 in
Canada
 it was just over 20000,
that is
 the lowest point.The second
from
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on
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 the list was
USA
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the USA
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 with just over 100000.In
Germany
 the poor decrease until 40000. There
was
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were
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 similar results in
USA
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the USA
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 in
Canada
 that was 40000.
On the contrary
, in
the
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apply
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Germany
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Germany,
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 it was just under 40000.There was the tiniest number of
the
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apply
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coffee
 importing in
UK
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the UK
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 that was equal to 20000
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada, uk, usa, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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