The bar chart shows information  about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The bar chart shows information  about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The featured graph illustrates the proportion of
students
'
favourite
subjects
in
school
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schools
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A and
B
.
Overall
, the percentage of children whose
favourite
subjects
are sport and
science
is higher in
school
A, and a different pattern is seen in other
subjects
. It is clear from the chart that, most of the
students
in
school
A choose sport as their
favourite
one, and the figure for the percentage is over 70%,
while
only 10% of
students
in
school
B
consider
this
subjets
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subject
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to be their first choice. Meanwhile,
school
A has more
students
interested in
science
too. There
are
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apply
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18% of children in
school
A prefer to learn
science
, which
is
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apply
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far
outweigh
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outweighs
show examples
school
B
with only 3% of
students
choose
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choosing
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science
as their major.
By contrast
,
school
B
have
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has
show examples
more
students
who take math, literature and drawing as their
favourite
subjects
. First of all, 50% of children would like to study
in
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apply
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drawing in
school
B
,
while
the
proportioin
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proportion
of
school
A is 8%.
Similarly
,
school
B
has more than 35% of
students
tend
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who tend
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to dive into literature and 20%
for
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into
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math, but
that
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the
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figure for
school
A is 10% and 12% respectively.
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