The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first diagram illustrates the process of
cement
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manufacturing, and the second diagram illustrates the components that are used in
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concrete production. During the initial step of
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cement
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manufacturing, clay and limestone are crushed into powder by the crushing machine.
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,
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crushed powder goes to the mixer. After that, the mixed powder is heated
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going through the rotating heater. Once the mixture has been heated, it is
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ground to make
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and packed in large bags.
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the second illustration, the four raw components are used to produce concrete:
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, water, sand and gravel (15%, 10%, 25% and 50% respectively). These materials are mixed together in the rotating concrete mixer.
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, there are five main steps in
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production, starting from adding raw materials and finishing with packing the finished product into bags. On the other side, the production of concrete requires fewer steps and more materials.
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