The bar chart shows the percentage of elderly citizens in three countries in 1980, 2000, and 2030

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The bar charts illustrate the number of old individuals who have been living in three different nations for half of a century, from 1980 to 2030.

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, it can be seen that the total number of the old generation will be increased in all countries but Canada has had better growth in comparison to others. On the one hand, the proportion of old citizens in Canada in 1980 was only about one in ten per cent which was the lowest

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in comparison to two other countries. In the next 20

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experienced a half increase that

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off to elderly people in the UK.

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, in the next 30

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has been surging drastically by more than 8% which will be stranded in the second country that has the oldest people.

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, in 1980 Germany and the UK were close in the total of old individuals with 15% and 13% respectively. Since Germany had the highest share of the number of elderly people in 1980,

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has been rising gradually over the next 50

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when it will reach its peak with a 5% increase each year.

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, the UK movement plateaued in the first 20

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and it has been seeing a minor rise of about only 3% which will be the youngest country compared to other nations.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

228 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

demographic trends
elderly population
percentage
growth rate
projections
factors influencing
implications
comparative analysis
social services
economy
population aging
elderly care
statistical data
historical trends
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