News stories on TV and in newspaper are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion?

Many individuals said stories
appears
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that appears
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on television and in
newspaper
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newspapers
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are more often accompanied by images that
seems
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more effective than saying
on
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in
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those
ads
. In my
prospective
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perspective
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its
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it's
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way more attractive in
this
essay we will discuss the same. To commence with,
Its
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it is
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true that photos are
way
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a way
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more attractive way of catching
peoples
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people's
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attention as many
dont
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don't
want to listen to
ads
that usually come in between
of
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apply
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their shows on TV mostly individuals have no option to skip these so rather turning
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them off
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they usually mute the
ads
.
However
,
while
watching the
ads
these images catch the concentration of
viewer
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viewers
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to buy
there
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products.
For instance
, Recent research conducted by
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the Indian
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Indian
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the Indian
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School Of
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Health
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shows
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a drastic
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drastic
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a drastic
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decline ratio of smokers in order to quit smokers from smoking the advertisers print
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apply
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some
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apply
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wiered
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wired
labels on their products like
picture
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the picture
a picture
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of someone in
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the hospital
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hospital
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the hospital
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seeking
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apply
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for
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apply
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lung
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lungs
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lung
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cancer,
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or mouth
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mouth
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or mouth
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cancer cure.
Moreover
,
its
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it
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was seen human
being
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beings
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avoid reading therefor,
reputated
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reputed
brands nowadays capture more customers via posing
picture
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pictures
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in their articles
also
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and also
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promoting upcoming
list
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lists
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of items.
Eventually
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it helps them to get more viewers and buyers.
To conclude
,
although
sometime
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sometimes
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it
feel
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feels
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annoying
becuase
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because
it
extend
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extends
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the content of that particular article or ad
in
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on
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televions
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televisions
television
yet i believe, many people dont like reading articles and watching
ads
so
looking
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by looking
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to
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at
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these picture
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this picture
these pictures
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they mainly understand
about
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apply
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the product.
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  • convey
  • emotions
  • visual aids
  • retain
  • transcend
  • language barriers
  • accessible
  • misleading
  • context
  • comprehensive
  • critical thinking skills
  • sensitive content
  • graphic
  • disturbing
  • emotional well-being
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