The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The supplied bar charts indicate the
amount
of
sale
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sales
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in online websites in various parts
in
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New
Zealand
over a decade. It can be clearly seen that people
prefered
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preferred
to spend their money on online
shops
for
travel
much more than some other
retails
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in 2003.
However
,in 2013 the average of money which was spent in web
shops
for film and music was the highest
amount
in New
Zealand
. In 2003,people paid their income in digital markets for
travel
and clothes,respectively 36% and 24% in New
Zealand
.(Which
travel
was the highest average over the whole year).Interestingly a third percentage of
sale
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sales
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for online
shops
was film and music in New
Zealand
in 2013.After
which
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,
this
amount
was 29% for
travel
in 2013.
In contrast
,the proportion of
sale
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sales
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of digital
shops
for film and music was slightly more than books with 21% and 19% in New
Zealand
in 2003.
Moreover
,in 2013,nearly a quarter of sales in online stores
was
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for books in New
Zealand
.
Following
this
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a tiny fraction of
sale
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sales
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in internet markets was for clothes roughly 16% in New
Zealand
in 2013 and was the lowest
amount
over the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sale, zealand, shops, travel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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