The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.

The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called 

Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the 

diagrams below.
The two maps depict the notable changes
of
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in
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a town located near the sea called Portland from 1950 to 2007.
Overall
, Portland has been largely
mordenized
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modernized
due to
the increasing population since 1950 as we can see construction has taken place in many areas
such
as housing, business and recreation. Looking closely
to
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at
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the western side of the main road. A
park
and
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apply
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a swimming pool and a
multi-storeu
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multi-storey
multi-store
car
park
was
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were
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built, replacing the old manufacturing area. Along the
park
in the
see
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sea
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, there is now a Yacht Marina for people parking their boats. Apartments, the main residential area of the town in 2007 rose up on the
oppsite
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opposite
side of the road where there was a car
park
57 years ago. In the southern part of the
twon
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town
two
, aligned the two sides of the main road, the previous massive grassland was replaced by commercial buildings
such
as shops and a cinema. To the
oppsite
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opposite
of the cinema, houses were
also
built to meet the needs of local inhabitants.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal area
  • transformation
  • landscape
  • land use
  • infrastructure
  • environmental modifications
  • residential development
  • urban living spaces
  • commercial areas
  • recreational facilities
  • economic landscape
  • green spaces
  • natural habitats
  • urban expansion
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