The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the diagrams below.
The two maps depict the notable changes
of
a town located near the sea called Portland from 1950 to 2007.
Change preposition
in
Overall
, Portland has been largely mordenized
Correct your spelling
modernized
due to
the increasing population since 1950 as we can see construction has taken place in many areas such
as housing, business and recreation.
Looking closely to
the western side of the main road. A Change preposition
at
park
and
a swimming pool and a Correct word choice
apply
multi-storeu
car Correct your spelling
multi-storey
multi-store
park
was
built, replacing the old manufacturing area. Along the Correct subject-verb agreement
were
park
in the see
, there is now a Yacht Marina for people parking their boats. Apartments, the main residential area of the town in 2007 rose up on the Correct your spelling
sea
oppsite
side of the road where there was a car Correct your spelling
opposite
park
57 years ago. In the southern part of the twon
, aligned the two sides of the main road, the previous massive grassland was replaced by commercial buildings Correct your spelling
town
two
such
as shops and a cinema. To the oppsite
of the cinema, houses were Correct your spelling
opposite
also
built to meet the needs of local inhabitants.Submitted by carriexue23 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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