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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#ou #minutes #line #graphs #show #subscriptions #phone #lines #four #countries #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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The line graphs illustrate the number of
people
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subscribe
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who subscribe
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 to cell
phone
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 lines and landlines in four
countries
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, Eritrea,
India
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, the
UK
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 and Uruguay, from 2005 to 2015.
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, we can see that in all
countries
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, landline subscriptions had a stable trend,
whereas
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 the trend of mobile
phone
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 subscriptions was upward over the
ten year
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ten-year
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 period. Interestingly,
people
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 from more developed
countries
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, namely the
UK
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 and
India
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, had higher subscription
rate
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rates
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 to
moblie
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mobile
 and fixed telephone lines.
There
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It
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 appears that there were more
people
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 using mobile
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phone
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phones
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 and
landline
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landlines
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 in wealthier
countries
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. The
UK
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 and
India
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 always had higher subscription
rate
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rates
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 than Eritrea and Uruguay to both
moblie
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mobile
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phone
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phones
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 and fixed telephone lines over the period. It is interesting to note that in 2005, British had the most
people
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 subscribed to both mobile
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phone
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phones
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 and landlines, at 10000 and 6000 respectively which
were
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apply
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doubled the figure of the second largest subscription,
India
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.
However
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, even more and more
people
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subscribe
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subscribed
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 to mobile
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phone
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phones
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 in the
UK
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 afterward,
India
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 surpassed that in 2009 and had been superior to
that
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the
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in
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apply
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UK
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 by 2015 by 5%.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, phone, countries, india, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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