ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The line graphs illustrate the number of
people
subscribe
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who subscribe
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to cell
phone
lines and landlines in four
countries
, Eritrea,
India
, the
UK
and Uruguay, from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
, we can see that in all
countries
, landline subscriptions had a stable trend,
whereas
the trend of mobile
phone
subscriptions was upward over the
ten year
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period. Interestingly,
people
from more developed
countries
, namely the
UK
and
India
, had higher subscription
rate
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rates
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to
moblie
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mobile
and fixed telephone lines.
There
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It
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appears that there were more
people
using mobile
phone
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phones
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and
landline
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landlines
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in wealthier
countries
. The
UK
and
India
always had higher subscription
rate
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rates
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than Eritrea and Uruguay to both
moblie
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mobile
phone
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phones
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and fixed telephone lines over the period. It is interesting to note that in 2005, British had the most
people
subscribed to both mobile
phone
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phones
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and landlines, at 10000 and 6000 respectively which
were
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apply
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doubled the figure of the second largest subscription,
India
.
However
, even more and more
people
subscribe
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subscribed
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to mobile
phone
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phones
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in the
UK
afterward,
India
surpassed that in 2009 and had been superior to
that
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the
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in
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apply
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UK
by 2015 by 5%.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, phone, countries, india, uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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