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The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes.

The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by four different countries in tonnes.
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The chart compares the overseas procurement of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 in various residences.
Overall
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, the amount of
tea
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 procured reached a peak compared to other countries,
while
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 the inward shipment of
coffee
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 in Canada remained relatively small. As the bar chart reveals, the quantity of
coffee
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 acquired in Canada and the USA was extremely similar at 40,000
tonnes
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 for each other,
whereas
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 the quantity of
tea
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 was half as much at 20,000
tonnes
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.
The
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apply
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Great Britain's inbound trade of
tea
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 was the highest at 160,000
tonnes
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,
while
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 the figure for
coffee
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 was extremely small-scale at 20,000
tonnes
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.The USA brings in approximately 110,000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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.
Germany
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Germany's
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 overseas procurement was similar amounts of those two beverages, with 42,000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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 and a slightly lower figure of 40,000
tonnes
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 for
tea
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • import quantities
  • tonnes
  • overall trends
  • significantly more popular
  • notable similarities or differences
  • cultural preferences
  • climate
  • economic factors
  • highlight
  • describe
  • compare
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