Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the 21st century, the environmental pollution is ever-increasing. Some people hold the view that
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experts need to find some other planets that can support life for humans predicting challenges to live
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the Earth in future
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if
this
problem happens continuously. I totally disagree with
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argument.
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exploring new planets will be costly.
For instance
, finding
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environment means we have to sacrifice all our money for that but we do not know the amount exactly because space exploration is an unpredictable work.
Consequently
, countries will
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treasures and individuals will have to face
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severe consequences
such
as poverty.
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shows that it is not an easy goal to move people into another space. Other than that, the required
time
to achieve
this
target is
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unknown
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Therefore
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this
will lead to more complicated situations
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because
pollution is increasing
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. It is possible that
although
we
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in finding
such
planets,
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may become to an
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extinction
at that
time
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Additionally
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wild life
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also
should be there to maintain our lives. Finding
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to carry them
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a major problem. Considering these factors, it can be noted that discovering alternative worlds is only a
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task. In conclusion, it has to be agreed that locating other spaces means not only a waste of money but
also
time
. Indeed, we cannot expect success of
such
explorations.
Hence
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impacts that we are currently facing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental degradation
  • sustainable development
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • biodiversity loss
  • climate change
  • greenhouse gases
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitable planets
  • space colonization
  • terraforming
  • ethical dilemmas
  • resource allocation
  • technological advancements
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