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the top piority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#piority #businesses #money #responsibilities
As far as
clareaty
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clarity
 in
managment
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management
managing
 a work is earning money and there is no need to have communication with
another
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 people or jobs,
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 with
this
 opinion. I will explain my
resons
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reasons
 in
this
 article.
Geting
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Getting
 good services
in
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 people with a higher range of quality
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is
 a
realy
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really
 good point which
make
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 more and more
coustomes
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customers
 every day for
this
 type of
bussiness
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business
. When
human
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 receive
this
 type of service, can have confidence about that company.
For example
 when we buy a product
that is
 great;
however
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 is
expencive
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expensive
 we have filling
relible
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reliable
. But these things without any communication are not enough for having a
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successful
 job. Considering
buy
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a
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really
high quality
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 food but the manager of
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the resturant
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resturant
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restaurant
 is so
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easy
with out
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without
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speakin
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speaking
speakin'
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extera
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extra
word
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,
abssolutely
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absolutely
 you get
confuse
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 to
it`s
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behaviore
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behaviour
.
In these
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 days everybody except
a
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apply
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good
behavior
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 .everybody
want
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 to have
really
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 good conversation when they are receiving a service. So I think a good company must collect both of
these view
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this view
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 to improve.
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