Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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structure
Ensure that your essay has a clear and logical structure. Start with a strong introduction that presents the two viewpoints and your own opinion clearly. Finish with a conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed in the essay.
cohesion
Improve coherence and cohesion by using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas. This helps the reader follow your argument and understand the relationship between your points.
development
Develop each point in more detail, using specific examples and explanations to support your arguments. This will make your response more comprehensive and convincing.
language
Pay attention to grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Errors in these areas can make your essay harder to read and understand.
content
You have made an attempt to discuss both viewpoints and presented your own opinion.
relevance
Your topic choice is relevant and pertinent to current global issues.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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