IELTS Writing Correction Service
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Band 4.5

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give contact details for when you are away give instructions about how to care for your pet describe other household duties Write at least 150 words.

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Dear James, I hope
your
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 are
going
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 well. I am delighted to know that you will be able to take care of my cats and my house
while
 I am going on
a
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vacation. I am writing to let you know some
instruction
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instructions
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 on how to look after my pets and
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to give you some details about my plan.
Firstly
, I would like to let you know about my vacation plans. As you know
that
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I am going to Scotland on
5th
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the 5th
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 of August. I will be staying there for a couple of weeks from
5th
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the 5th
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 of August to
27th
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the 27th
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 of August. During those days in case of any
emergency
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 you can contact me via email. Here I have mentioned my emails in the
below attached
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 documents. As you know
that
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my cats are young,
they
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and they
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 will
be needing
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 either food or snacks every two hours. I have refilled their
foods
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food
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 in my kitchen drawers so you can use them.
Furthermore
, I wanted to let you know that, they are allergic to peanuts. Can you please make sure that they are not having peanuts
.
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 I would be glad if you
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 them for a walk every day.
Additionally
, I am growing some plants in my garden and
also
 I have kept a few in my kitchen. I would be delighted if you water them every couple of days.
Although
 I will be out for a couple of weeks, I haven't turned off my water supply. Let me know if you need any additional information. Yours lovingly, Sarah.
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There's a slight inconsistency in the way dates are presented. There's no need to repeat 'of August' twice for the same date. Simply writing '5th to 27th August' should suffice.
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Make sure to maintain consistent subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'I hope you are doing well' instead of 'I hope your are going well').
coherence cohesion
Consider dividing the paragraph about the cats into two: one about feeding and the other about allergies and walks. This will enhance clarity.
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Good job on clearly specifying the timeframe and giving detailed instructions for pet care and other household duties.
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The writing tone is friendly and attentive, which is appropriate for a letter to a close friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-structured, providing a warm start and end to the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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