The diagram below shows the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram below shows the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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The flowchart illustrates the steps which are done to produce
bricks
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for the building industry.
first,
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the digger
is digging
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digs
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clay and after that transport them on a metal grid roller to apart them
then
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sand and water are mixed and
is
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apply
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poured into
wire
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a wire
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cutter
in addition
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mould
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to mould
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tp
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to
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prodice
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produce
produced
bricks
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. After doing these processes
bricks
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is
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are
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moved into the drying oven for 24 to 48 hours.
The next step is
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that, hitting the
bricks
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first at 200
degrees
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c-980
degrees
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c,
then
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in
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apply
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a higher
degrees
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which is 870
degrees
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to 1300
degrees
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and
finally
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cooling chamber is done for 48-72 hours, during
this
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time they cool.
in
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latest step
bricks
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is packed and delivery transportation bring them to the customers. The process of
manufacture
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manufacturing
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bricks
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is
doing
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done
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by
almoust
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almost
8 steps to produce
bricks
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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