In this day and age,it is considered by plethora of individuals that characters are impacted by environment rather than genetics.This is the very correlation between biosphere and generations that affect to the humans situation. There are two principal reasons for this.

In
this
day and age,it is considered by
plethora
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a plethora
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of individuals that characters are impacted by environment rather than genetics.
This
is the very correlation between
biosphere
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and generations that affect
to
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the
humans
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human's
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situation. There are two principal reasons for
this
. I partly agree with
this
viewpoint because
character
is altered always by
spmething
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something
that
its
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it
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commence
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to influence good or bad sides.
For instance
,
people
will sense on cloud nine,if
weather
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is fine.But,
people
cannot always feel immensely grateful,they destroy
environment
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the environment
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,it
cause
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people
's worse behaviour
also
,death.Many
people
see fresh
environment
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environments
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such
kind of sunny ,rainy ,clear skies,heavy clouds,light winds and so on.
People
go to the picnic
with
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in
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hot and humid weather.They have a good mood,let alone
character
.If it were not for
persons
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what
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who
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are like
weather
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the weather
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,they would not have changed their characters and they are always been
emotional
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wreek
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week
wreck
wreak
.
On the other hand
,
people
's genetics play
crucial
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role in their life expectancy.
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,their line
have
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similar
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a similar
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character
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characters
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that
its
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apply
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cannot
disappearance
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. They are negative or mover and shaker by virtue of their genetics
have
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and have
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various
character
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characteristics
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. In a nutshell,
people
how their
character
will be
as well as
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how its
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its
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it
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relate
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themselves
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.
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear stance on the topic, but the arguments are not always fully developed. Try to provide more detailed explanations and examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay needs improvement. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your points flow logically from one to the next. Use transition phrases to link your ideas more coherently.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving your grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas more clearly. Avoid repetitive phrases and aim for more variety in sentence structures.
task achievement
You make a clear attempt to address both sides of the argument, which is great.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion attempts to summarize your main points, which helps to bring closure to your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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