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Band 3.5

In this day and age ,it is considered by a plethora of individuals that,expensive and scarcity for utilize energy sources such as wind ,sun,waves' power.This is very energy resources that we are to use on a daily basis.This essay will outline both arguments ,and then conclusion will be drawn.

In
this
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 day and age ,it is considered by a plethora of individuals that,expensive and scarcity
for
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to
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 utilize
energy
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 sources
such
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 as wind ,sun,
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and waves'
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waves'
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wave'
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 power.
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This
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These
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is
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are
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 very
energy
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 resources that we are to use on a daily basis.
This
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 essay will outline both arguments ,and
then
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conclusion
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a conclusion
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 will be drawn.
To begin
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 with,suitable
energy
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 resources are unlikely to
use
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be
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 affordable or free.There is nothing worse than spending
waste
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energy
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.
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,
population
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the population
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 are providing
energy
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for
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 charge their city or transport, as
result
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a result
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 of which they commence to spend excessively on and on.If it were not for never-ending
energy
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,we would not have developed or provided
ourselves
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for ourselves
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.
Nature
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Nature's
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 power can affect
for
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apply
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our
life
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lives
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 and supply more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to develop countries.
This
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 is because,all devices ,factories,
transports
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and transports
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 running with
energy
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 by virtue of gadgets get accustomed to using
energy
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.Undeniably we disburse plenty of
energy
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 so much so that oil
field
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fields
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 and gas cannot replace as come in handy.
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 is
very
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 action that could not cease the
emmision
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emission
 of spending
natural
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on natural
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 materials.The majority of governments had better find alternative
way
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ways
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for
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to
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 serve
energy
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 and stop
the
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apply
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using more
energy
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 .
Nonetheless
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,l believe that
energy
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using
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use
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have
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has
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momentous
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a momentous
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 role in our
life
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lives
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.We can discover efficient machines which its get used to working with natural power only to decrease the using of gas or ending
energy
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. In a nutshell ,it is clear from
above
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the above
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 arguments that
energy
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 sources are unlikely to end ,but we had better use with tactfully.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and clarity. Some sentences are difficult to understand due to awkward phrasing and punctuation errors.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses one main point. Your paragraphs contain several ideas that are not directly related, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. The example given is somewhat vague and does not clearly illustrate the main argument.
task achievement
Avoid generalizations and unsupported claims; provide evidence and explanations for your statements to make your argument more convincing.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, demonstrating an ability to consider multiple perspectives, which is important for a well-rounded essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame the discussion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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