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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010 (Figures are in millions of dollars). Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010 (Figures are in millions of dollars). Write at least 150 words.
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The provided table indicates how much
money
 was given to expended
countries
 per million dollars by America,European
countries
 and other
countries
 over a
four- year
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four-year
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 period. It can be clearly seen that America was the only country which provided the highest amount of
money
 for developing
countries
 over the period.
However
,Other
countries
 did not prefer to give
money
 to progressed
countries
 over the span. As regards America,The amount of
money
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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given to the best
economical
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economic
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countries
totaled
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totalled
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 9.8 million dollars in 2006.
Following
this
,there was a modest increase
for
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in
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money
 given to
progressed
Verb problem
developed
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countries
 between 2006 to 2010.For more details,The US spent 20.3 million dollars on developing
countries
 in 2010.(Which was the highest level over the whole year).Interestingly,the amount of
money
 which was spent on growing
countries
 in total accounted for $28.1
millions
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million
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 in 2010.
In contrast
,Other
countries
 were not keen on
to get
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getting
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 some
money
 to developing
countries
 and It
included
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was
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 2.8 in 2006.(Which was the lowest average in the whole
years
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year
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).
Moreover
,European
countries
 paid the same as Other
countries
 with a small change.
For example
,in 2010 European
countries
 and Other
countries
 supported developing
area
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areas
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,with $4.1
millions
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million
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 and $3.7
millions
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million
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,respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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