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Describe the last time you received an important letter or email. You should say: who the letter or email was from when you received it what it was about and explain how it made you feel.

#time #email
E-mails play a very crucial role in everybody's life and it has become an important part of everybody's routine. We all receive e-mails every
day
 as it shows a formal way of working. I receive many e-mails every
day
 related to
job
 vacancies, online shopping, and so on. The
last
 time I received an
e-mail
 was related to a pre-primary school
job
.I was looking for a
job
 in the pre-primary section. So, I gave an
interview
 in an international school. My
interview
 went very well. After giving the
interview
 I went home and the very next
day
, I received an
e-mail
 from the organization. It said You have passed your
interview
 and can join our company in July month. All the details about the school were mentioned in the
e-mail
 like who I have to report to, what will be the shift timings, what policies of the company, and so on. Each and every piece of information related to the
job
 was mentioned there. After reading that
e-mail
 I felt relaxed and comfortable and I was very happy that I had passed the
interview
. I was on cloud nine that
day
. I shared that
e-mail
 with my best friends and they were very happy about my performance and wished me the best of luck with my new
job
. So, It was the most important
e-mail
 that I have received in my lifetime till now and
definitely
Add a comma
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 it changed my life in a good way.
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Try to add a clear conclusion to summarize your thoughts and reinforce the impact of the email on your life.
supported main points
You might want to elaborate slightly more on each point to provide a richer description and more detailed context.
complete response
Good job specifying the source, timing, and content of the email, which adequately covers the task.
logical structure
Your essay is logically structured, making it easy to follow your train of thought.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets the stage for describing the important email you received.

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