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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps present significant changes in a
city
 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, during 3
years
, few areas still remained the same and others converted into something.
In addition
, some places
has
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 enlarged. In 2007,
city
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the city
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 hospital was the same
from
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as
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 the previous
years
, located in the north of the maps and surrounded by Ring
Road
. The
car
park
 in 2010,
divided
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was divided
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 into two categories, first for staff of the hospital and located similar to the previous 3
years
. Meanwhile, the other
car
park
, which
for
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is for
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public
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the public
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, and the location
in
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is in
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 the east of
City
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the City
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 hospital. The
car
park
 was different between 2007 and 2010. Looking at the figures,
Bus
station
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stations
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was exists
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existed
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 in 2010 and enlarged from the previous
years
 which only
Bus
stop
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stops
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.
Bus
 station
located
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is located
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in
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apply
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the
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apply
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near
of
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apply
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Hospital
Road
that
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which
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connected
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connects
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between
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apply
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2
City
hospital
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hospitals
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 and
roundabout
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a roundabout
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at
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in
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 the West area.
Furthermore
, there were
also
 significant
change
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changes
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 for
aroundabout
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a roundabout
roundabout
around about
,
whereas
 the previous
years
 had no exist. The first roundabout
located
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is located
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 between
City
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the City
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 hospital and
Bus
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the Bus
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 station
also
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and also
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staff
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the staff
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car
park
. The
second,
in the south of the maps
and
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apply
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made
connection
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the connection
a connection
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for
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between
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 Hospital
road
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Road
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 and
City
road
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Road
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, years, road, car, park, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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