The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps present significant changes in a
city
hospital between 2007 and 2010. Use synonyms
Overall
, during 3 Linking Words
years
, few areas still remained the same and others converted into something. Use synonyms
In addition
, some places Linking Words
has
enlarged.
In 2007, Change the verb form
have
Use synonyms
city
hospital was the same Correct article usage
the city
from
the previous Change preposition
as
years
, located in the north of the maps and surrounded by Ring Use synonyms
Road
. The Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
in 2010, Use synonyms
divided
into two categories, first for staff of the hospital and located similar to the previous 3 Add a missing verb
was divided
years
. Meanwhile, the other Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
, which Use synonyms
for
Add a missing verb
is for
public
, and the location Add an article
the public
in
the east of Add a missing verb
is in
Use synonyms
City
hospital. The Correct article usage
the City
car
Use synonyms
park
was different between 2007 and 2010.
Looking at the figures, Use synonyms
Bus
Use synonyms
station
Fix the agreement mistake
stations
was exists
in 2010 and enlarged from the previous Change the verb form
existed
years
which only Use synonyms
Bus
Use synonyms
stop
. Fix the agreement mistake
stops
Bus
station Use synonyms
located
Add a missing verb
is located
in
Change preposition
apply
the
near Correct article usage
apply
of
Hospital Change preposition
apply
Road
Use synonyms
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
connected
Wrong verb form
connects
between
2 Change preposition
apply
City
Use synonyms
hospital
and Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
roundabout
Correct article usage
a roundabout
at
the West area. Change preposition
in
Furthermore
, there were Linking Words
also
significant Linking Words
change
for Fix the agreement mistake
changes
aroundabout
, Correct your spelling
a roundabout
roundabout
around about
whereas
the previous Linking Words
years
had no exist. The first roundabout Use synonyms
located
between Add a missing verb
is located
Use synonyms
City
hospital and Correct article usage
the City
Use synonyms
Bus
station Correct article usage
the Bus
Linking Words
also
Correct word choice
and also
staff
Correct article usage
the staff
car
Use synonyms
park
. The Use synonyms
second,
in the south of the maps Linking Words
and
made Correct word choice
apply
connection
Add an article
the connection
a connection
for
Hospital Change preposition
between
Use synonyms
road
and Capitalize word
Road
City
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
road
.Capitalize word
Road
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, years, road, car, park, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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