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The line chart below gives information about the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries (2000 – 2012)

The line chart below gives information about the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries (2000 – 2012)
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The line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of parliament in European countries between 2000-2012. Units are measured in
percentage
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 (%).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest
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 were Italy and
Germany
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.
Otherwise
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, the smallest
percentage
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 was in the
UK
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. At the beginning of the period,
Germany
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 had the highest
percentage
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 around 35% compared to others. Italy,
France
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, and
Belgium
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 accounted for approximately 28%, 27%, and 17%, respectively. In 2000, the
UK
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 was only about 4% which was the smallest country of the xxx. In 2004,
France
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 surpassed the two countries (
Germany
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 and Italy) and became the highest
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 of female members of parliament to the others Europe where around 36%. There were significant differences between the
UK
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 and Italy, approximately three times the
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 and
Belgium
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 still remained in the same position in the previous 4 years. In 2008, the
percentage
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 of the
UK
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 female members was significantly increased or doubled from 2004.
However
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,
France
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's
percentage
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 dramatically decreased which accounted for around only 30%. Italy has slightly increased and the 2 countries,
Germany
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 and
Belgium
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 were not significantly changed compared to the previous years.
At the end
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 of the period, Italy surpassed
Germany
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 by almost 40% and
France
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 steadily increased from the previous year to around 32%.
UK
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's
percentage
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 grew significantly and
Belgium
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's was similar to
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percentage
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the percentage
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, approximately 28% in 2012
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, germany, uk, france, belgium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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