Some people are making new friends by socializing network websites and internet chat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people opine that people should make new friends by face to face chat. Discuss both views and given your own opinion.
It turned out a trend
making
new Change the verb form
to make
friends
Use synonyms
in
social Change preposition
on
media
and Use synonyms
keeping
in touch with them Wrong verb form
keep
with
the use of websites. Some Change preposition
through
people
think that it is Use synonyms
good
way Change the article
a good
for socializing
, Change preposition
to socialize
however
, others believe that Linking Words
people
have to meet with their Use synonyms
friends
, do outdoor activities and have Use synonyms
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face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
conversations. In my opinion, Use synonyms
best
way is socializing in actual life but having online Add an article
the best
friends
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Linking Words
also
good if you know how to balance your Add a missing verb
is also
time
Use synonyms
while
surfing on internet.
The primary reason for Linking Words
this
is that Linking Words
people
sometimes can confuse their actual Use synonyms
life
with social Fix the agreement mistake
lives
media
when they spend a lot of Use synonyms
time
in it. Use synonyms
And if
you have a friend online it means that you have Correct word choice
If
spend
Replace the word
spent
time
with her, and Use synonyms
this
can Linking Words
make
some issues in your daily routine because of spending a lot of Verb problem
cause
time
on Use synonyms
internet
. Add an article
the internet
That is
why you have to balance the Linking Words
time
that you spend with chatting. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, if they are able to control their Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
then
it is a good way Linking Words
for socializing
because Change preposition
to socialize
while
they are making Linking Words
friends
from all over the world at the same Use synonyms
time
they are learning about new places, cultures, religions, and languages.
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Secondly
, spending Linking Words
time
with their friend Use synonyms
while
they are next to them is the best thing for relieving stress. When Linking Words
people
are next to their loved ones, it makes them to Use synonyms
forgot
about every Change the verb
forget
stressing
thing. Replace the word
stressful
Additionally
, nowadays everyone Linking Words
need
to put their phones down and spend Change the verb form
needs
time
without Use synonyms
it
. Having Correct pronoun usage
them
Use synonyms
face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
face
conversations Use synonyms
one
of the best ways for being away from all that social Add a missing verb
is one
media
stuff.
All in all, if persons able to Use synonyms
controll
the Correct your spelling
control
time
that they spend Use synonyms
in
social Change preposition
on
media
Use synonyms
then
having online Linking Words
friends
can be Use synonyms
usefull
for their Correct your spelling
useful
life
and can make them happy, Fix the agreement mistake
lives
however
having Linking Words
friends
without distances between you is the best choice.Use synonyms
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