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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table demonstrates
total
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 amount of
minutes
which
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telephone
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telephones
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 have been called in The United
kingdom
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. In fact, all the
call
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calls
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 has been
devieded
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divided
devised
in
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into
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 three different types from the year
of
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1995 to 2002.
Overall
, the highest call from the
starting
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 is
local
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a local
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 call for fixing the line.
Nevertheless
is
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it
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 has been increased and
delined
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declined
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.
While
,
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 National and
INternational
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International
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 call for
maintanace
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maintenance
 is slightly
incereased
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increased
 since started.
On the other hand
,
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the percentages
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percentages
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 of mobile calls is the lowest since there have been started but extremely increased
in
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 the end or period
time
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. To start with, Local
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calls
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call
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,
72
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were 72
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billion
minutes
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at
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 1995 and reached
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to
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90
billion
minutes
 in 1999, As the information gives 8% of
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calls
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calling
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 increased in between 5 years.
However
, in the
last
 3 years since
development
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the development
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 of technology
was
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declined to 72
billion
minutes
 as started in the year
of
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2002.
In contrast
, two different
type
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types
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 of
call
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calls
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, which are
Ntaional
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national
 and International
and
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apply
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Mobile
call
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calls
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 it
has
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been
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increased
in
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every
years
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. Despite
of
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that, Mobile
call
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calls
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, dramatically rose to 45
billion
minutes
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minute
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call
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 in the year 0f 2002.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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