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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how often
people
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 ate at junk
food
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 restaurants in the USA over the decade period.
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, the
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day or never
percent
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per cent
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 almost similar in 3 years. And
people
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 who
ate
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eat
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 at a fast
food
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 restaurant once a week and once or twice a month are almost similar too. The number of
people
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 who were eating fast
food
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 once a week and
also
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 once or twice a month in 2003 was almost 31% but
this
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 group in 2006 increased by approximately 33% and decreased by 27% in 2013. The other group which is once or twice a month were so close to the
last
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 one, in 2003 they were 30%
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 they divided by 25% in 2006, after that
this
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 group sharpened by close to 35%. The number of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day and never in these three years was less than 5 per cent.
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, the number of others that ate several times a week was less than 15% in 2003 and 2013,
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, these persons surged to 20 percent in 2006. The range of
people
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 that were eating a few times a year was
also
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 15% in 2006 and 2013 but they were fewer than 15% in 2003.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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