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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of comparison of renewable energy in the amount of energy sources in
Australia
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,
Sweden
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, Iceland and Turkey
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in three different years; 1997, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that Iceland had the highest energy supply among other nations.
In addition
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,
Australia
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 and
Sweden
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 were the lowest.
To begin
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 with, the contribution in the ratio of renewable resources in Iceland and
Sweden
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 experienced an upward trend throughout the period. Iceland’s percentage started at around 42% and increased dramatically by 40% until 2010.
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, the increase in
Sweden
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 was only about 2% incrementally, resulting in 8%
at the end
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 of the year.
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, Turkey and
Australia
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 had a decrease during the same time frame. Starting at 38% , Turkey's ratio slightly rose to 40% before it saw a dip to 32%. Meanwhile, there was a gradual decline which is 1% in
Australia
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, starting around 8% to 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • renewable energy
  • total energy supply
  • percentage
  • overall
  • changed
  • increases
  • decreases
  • fluctuating
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • commitment
  • sustainability
  • environmental protection
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