The line chart below gives information about the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries (2000 – 2012)

The line chart below gives information about the percentage of female members of parliament in European countries (2000 – 2012)
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the data about the percentage of
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females
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who
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joined
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parliament seats in five
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nations in Europe between 2000 to 2012.
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by the amount of proportion that people which is female gender who
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joined into
parties
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seats after
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selected
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from
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their
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population
in each
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in Europe.
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, since
started
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two Nations
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increased. Despite
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The UK is rapidly rose up.
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, Germany
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fluctuated whilst Belgeim
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rise up
then
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in the highest proportion but still
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in the same position in 12 years era.
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second
high but reach at top of
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females
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who
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parliament
in
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the end of
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time. At
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The UK was only one of
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the
country
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countries
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which
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at
bottom
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of
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, but extremely
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increased
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election and
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Belgium.
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ahead, France is another nation that women are interested in a nation
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parties
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.
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has
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decreased
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gradually
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up in
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of
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secone
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second
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. On the
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hand, Belgium is another nation that
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people
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focusing
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a
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year
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2000 to 2004 but after that sit
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at
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the same point.
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