The charts bellow give information about travel to and from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.

The charts bellow give information about travel to and  from UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit.
The
figuers
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figures
illustrate the data about the
UK
as a travel destination
as well as
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of
british
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tourists
that visited different nations over a
20-years
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20-year
period.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
UK
citizens were excited about travelling to other countries
instead
of staying in their
hometown
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.
Also
, France and Spain were the most popular
destination
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destinations
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among them. First of all, in 1979 the rate of
british
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tourists
were
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at almost the same level
of
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people who came from other nations to
the
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England with only about 10
millions
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million
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visitors
. In the next 5 years
besids
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besides
beside
a minor growth in foreign
tourists
number, the rate of travelling to outside of the
UK
got doubled in1989. From 1984 to 1999, the number of
the
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UK
visitors
was
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experienced a dramatic
surged
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which increased
more
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than one-third per cent and reached
to
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52
millions
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million
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visitors
.
However
, over
this
period the rate of
visitors
from outside rose gradually and
was seen
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a 15% rise in total. Second of all, in 1999 , France was the most popular destination for
english
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citizens with more than 11
millions
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million
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visitors
.
Furthermore
, Spain with 4
millions less
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million fewer
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tourists
in comparison to France stood in the
secound
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second
most attractive
places
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place
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.
However
, Turkey with only 3
millions
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million
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visitors
was
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was the least popular place
between
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among
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british
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people.
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